When you are interviewing someone, and you want to quote that person directly, how should you identify who is talking? Compare these examples:
- Mrs. Smith said that I might want to avoid the back yard because the dog poops there.
- Mrs. Smith said, “You might want to avoid the backyard. That’s where the dog poops.”
- “You might want to avoid the back yard. That’s where the dog poops,” said Mrs. Smith.
- “You might want to avoid the backyard,” Mrs. Smith said. “That’s where the dog poops.”
Each of the examples offers the same information, yet one excels. Let’s examine them individually to find out why.
- Because what is said is more important than who says it, the first and second examples are not as good as the third and fourth examples. But the first example has another problem: it uses an indirect quotation when a direct quotation is livelier. The reader would prefer to hear the exact words of the person being interviewed, providing that person is not hemming and hawing.
- The second example improves on the first example because it replaces the indirect quotation with a direct quotation. But it still starts with the least interesting information, who is speaking.
- The third example is better than the first two because it uses direct quotes to start. However, the reader needs to wait until the completion of the quote before knowing who is speaking. Since there are two sentences, it makes sense to identify the speaker at the end of the first sentence.
- The fourth example identifies the speaker after the first part of the direct quote, the correct location to do so. And it directly quotes the speaker. This example wins.
So, to recap, use direct quotes rather than indirect quotes when the quotation is lively and dramatic, or when it shows off the speaker’s personality or diction. Start with the direct quote, but pause either at the end of the first sentence or at a natural spot in the first sentence to identify the speaker.